This is what I have so far. Any ideas or advice that could help me. Please comment thank you.
Police have abused their rights by using brutal force against criminals and even helpless people to protect american citizens. There have been many cases of police brutality throughout the united states. I will be focusing on the cases of police brutality that have occurred here in New York for example on wall street with the Occupy Wall Street movement. Protesters are being attacked and injured for their freedom of speech which is unfair. The police should be focusing on violent acts not on speeches being made by american citizens.
Harddy Ceballos
Harddy,
ReplyDeleteYou've chosen a fine topic: police brutality. Perhaps you would wish to offer a historical example or two as well to show any (dis)continuous trends between the past (Civil Right Movement, Women's Suffrage, LA Roits, for example) and the present (OWS).
The sentence in bold needs to be revised. I am confused as to who the police are truly abusing and who they are truly protecting...
Also, you focus on the freedom of speech in the last two sentences. What is your interest with this? How does it connect to your thesis in bold?
I like the topic that you chose...it's different but it has many connections to the primary texts that we read in class. So far your ideas are good, you could add a little more information in regards to how you will carry out your thesis. Great job though so far:)
ReplyDeleteOkay so I will revise it a little and try to answer the questions you just asked in your comment and thanks Malika I will try my best.
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